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Two Phrase Story #18

I provide the first phrase and you complete the sentence, in your own way and we see in how many different directions one thought can be taken…..

“The jets of water from the shower-head were cold as ice…….”


My attempt

“…….but her finger impresses on his skin still burned.”


Your turn!

About hbhatnagar

I need to fill this up with much better content than I had populated it with earlier. Why I write a blog maybe? I started blogging in 2009 or thereabouts. I was a newly turned atheist and wanted to converse with others of the same persuasion. We're not exactly a big population group in India! It didn't go very well and I sort of lost interest, posting a few things now and then. I got a lot more regular over the last few months and have been posting almost daily since February '15. There were many reasons why I gradually became more regular in posting, but one way or the other, here I am! So this blog has taken shape, being at different points in time my showcase, my comedy club, my art gallery, my book club, my therapist, my close friend, my innermost self....but always my little corner of the world. You are all welcome to visit and I hope you stay awhile! A few points about me because I don't want to lead anyone on(and trust me this does become an issue more often than I'd care to admit). I'm Indian, the brown-skinned variety; if race, ethnicity or skin colour is an issue, you don't have to get to know me any more than what you see on my blog. I'm 40, so if age is an issue, please be informed accordingly. I was a doctor, an ophthalmic surgeon for 10 years before I quit practice.


36 thoughts on “Two Phrase Story #18

  1. …But it didn’t stop them from steaming things up and how !

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by priyankamoraes | 23/11/2015, 2:22 PM
  2. The jets of water from the shower-head were cold as ice, he thought, as he rubbed on a very stubborn stain on her thigh, letting the water wash over her lifeless body.

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by C. T. | 14/11/2015, 4:07 AM
  3. “…I screamed and jumped back and yelled out at my son to NOT flush the toilet while mommy is showering!”

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by Jen | 12/11/2015, 10:19 PM
  4. Wow, so many versions for the cold shower water… I like your version. πŸ™‚

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by Amy | 12/11/2015, 10:12 PM
  5. The jets from the shower-head were cold as ice, numbing her throbbing pain, and reviving her heart.

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by Soumya Mishra | 12/11/2015, 5:59 PM
  6. and they screamed “Bura na mano Holi hai!!!”

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by Lakshmi Srivatsan | 12/11/2015, 4:36 PM
  7. “…piercing his heart like a knife, causing his breath to catch for a moment before he reached for the bottle of shampoo.”

    Liked by 2 people

    Posted by Victo Dolore | 12/11/2015, 3:23 PM
  8. I soon decimated to a petty pilorected porcupine.

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by Vamagandhi | 12/11/2015, 2:57 PM
  9. …so he stayed there like on every other morning he could remember of, chilling in the ritual of waiting for warm water to complete its route from the hot water tank to his skin.

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by HeavyCloud | 12/11/2015, 2:02 PM
  10. I shivered, jumped back, debated whether to turn on the heater but decided to brave it and took the plunge into goosebumps and more shivers and shudders and a quick shower. Invigorating … but maybe warm water cascading down may have been better πŸ™‚ except the chills again when you step out.

    Liked by 1 person

    Posted by Rambling Rose | 12/11/2015, 11:42 AM
  11. I squealed, slapped him heartily and then proceed to stick my tongue down his throat.

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    Posted by Tessa | 12/11/2015, 10:20 AM
  12. “…so I jumped back in horror with skin like chicken legs. Who would take a cold shower in this ungodly weather? ” (Reflecting on the cold I went through today and which made me panic about possibly having mild frostbite…hypochondriac med student here)

    Liked by 2 people

    Posted by Borderline Med | 12/11/2015, 9:50 AM

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